Well, first of all I have no idea what to name it. Also the design seems bare. Any ideas to cover it up?

neon flight

are those feathers left behind? they're a little hard to see.

Yeah they are, bigger feathers?

i like the sparceness of the design. but i'm not sure i like that the feathers are rendered in the same method as the bird.

the bird seems very "electric" as it takes flight.

i think the feathers are important because that's how i knew the bird had just taken off rather than has been in the air for a while.



maybe the feathers are a flat grey (less lively)? perhaps they're dimmer colors, or drawn as single lines (rather than 2 or 3 each).



the colors on the bird on the black shirt look great. it really gives it motion.

the feathers need to be shaped like feathers and not chili peppers.

Haha I'm going to try something, let me know if it helps at all.

I just combined 2 of the versions

oooohhhh... i really like it!

If i understand the "submission declined" reasons correctly the design cannot cross the seams, such as how the tip of your bird's head does.



otherwise, neat idea! how about making the feathers in blue, green, red colours instead of white, ya know, from the elements of the bird.

I'm not completely sure what your suggesting the feathers look like but I'll give it a shot.

I had to redo the feathers completely because any different renders of the old feathers looked like crap. Better? Worse?

Oh and yeah I liked it; new name of shirt is Neon Flight.

i love it. sub it!

You sure?

Hmmm declined.... ideas?

The feathers are the right shape, but they look completely different from the bird and don''t belong on the same shirt together. I actually like the look of the feathers more than the bird. Maybe rethink the bird.

I can do that.

Well, I'm not sure. I had two versions to begin with. So now I am bringing both out. Which bird? Or just a completely new one?

Ideas?

the black one looks best :)

my eye's!!!! yeah i think the black one looks better.

it appears that the trajectory of the bird in this version is such that the feathers are under him, whereas in V1 the feathers seemed to be a bit more behind him (which i prefer). i think this is due to the fact that the bird is a little larger since version 1 and maybe he's pointed up slightly less.

i also think that the feathers in v2 best match the language of the glowing white bird shown here. i like this new glowing white bird, by the way.

Well, as I told you I had 2 different versions to start out with, the outline one and then this one. Each with their own feathers.

A version of this is being scored!

http://www.threadless.com/submission/166258/Flight_of_Bird