Thanks to for work out the scoreboard for me.



Let me know what you think, thanks!

Nice style but the concept is not very appealing to me...

Different print size and smaller scoreboard.

Thanks to "lunchboxbrain" for work out the scoreboard for me. (Sorry, the html script doesn't work here..)

Maybe if the 00:03 on the scoreboard was theo nly thing in RED, it would have a more immediate impact...

And maybe some color for the bomb wick and the sparks flying off of it...

V3.



lol.. FA, this is the first time I saw your comments in critique.

V4.

Woa, slow down there tex.

Oh daaaaaaaaaaaaamn....that version is better! So much more excitement and emphasis on the clock and the connection really pops out atcha!!! The off-to-the-side view is better, but maybe make it coming from the left side and even a tad bigger for added effect...this is coming a long way towards awesome FM and lunchbox!

I like v3 better....but bigger.

V5

My opinion, hes not going to sink that shot in the last 3 secs. He's going to choke. Cool idea. Reminds me of the And1 campaign. Not a big fan of the sports on a tee but hey thats just me.

thanks man.

wow, the perspective on this one is great. i don't like sports but this is pretty interesting.



there's a lot going on in the background that i wonder absolutely has to be there in order to keep the movement and the mood. for instance, the sponsored by.



the only other thing i could think of is somehow tying the red in somewhere else too.



i don't notice the bomb right away, but maybe that is the plan?

I can't decide which version I like best. I'm leaning towards 5, though.



I love the concept and illustration. You managed to convey the mindset of what goes through a player's head in buzzer beater situations. IT's all or nothing.

Thanks Chelly, actually I also thinking to put more red on other part of the image. But just worries it will lost some focus on the "00:03".

Thanks nintechno. Still have something need to revise, though.

I like V5 but I like the design being on the bottom like V3

Your mean the side bottom placement like V3?

yup

V6

I'm still all about v3, BUT BIGGER!!!!! I don't like the scores in red too, it takes even more attention off the main theme of the tee, which is the bomb in the basketball player's hand and that time is running out....

How about this one?

if you want emphasis on the scores, then maybe try having them in yellow?

Thanks for your suggestion man. But my previous sub "See you at the top" told me that, a lot of peoples don't really like yellow match with grey.



Anyhow, I appreciate your suggestion ;)

Can you color the backboard? Gray doesn't show excitement, which this scene needs.

Kojima, are you meant like this?

Everything should be in color. The board usually has white/yellow lights.

i love it black-and-white, but i think the fuse/sparks should be red, and pointed more toward 5 o'clock so as not to blend into the timer. awesome so far.

i dig V2 but you definitely need to throw some color in the mix. the shot clock, home and guest scores and the possesion light (on the guest side) and the bomb fuse should all be red. maybe some parts of the uniform/sneakers/headband should be red as well. a splash of color can go a long way. awesome work on this so far FM!

I like your v8; just the right amount of colors.

How about this one?

I like how this is coming along. How would it look if the bomb was red as well, just to highlight it?

yeah! the color is where it's at! i'd make some part (not all) of the sneakers red. maybe the light grey part before the sole. looking good FM!

Color the shoes in like lunchbox said, color the armband in as well, use the bigger upright version of v10, and SUBMIT!!! Wow...awesome job everyone making sure this could be the best possible design it could be! Flying Mouse is the best with constructive criticism and implementing exaclty what the design needs in all of Threadless...

Oh, and we need to do something about this design's name before you submit it...how about "Three Point Bomb" or "Bombing Run"?

I'd go with "Hot Potato" or "Short Fuse"

WanderingBert, I just try the red on the bomb. It's notreally work. Thanks for your comment ;)



yea lunchboxbrain, thanks for your help for the scoreboard drawing. It look really cool and match with my character!



FA, I'm thinking of the title also. Still haven't decide yet...



FA:

- Three Point BOmb

- BOmbing Run



lunchboxbrain:

- Hot Potato

- Short Fuse

thanks FM. looking at the latest version again, i'm liking it a lot. the print size and placement of the bottom pic is awesome - big, side wrap.



i think the perspective of the scoreboard is a little too warped. the top right corner is a little too high which makes it hard to read the score and shot clock. i'd say bring that down a bit and it'll be good to go.

lunchboxbrain, here you go.

But I like V11 actually.

I'm digging 12 but you're the mastermind FM :) Either way, I think this will do well.

Thanks man, let see ;)

Nice work FM, i like it, especially as a basketball addict. I think it's good with the sneakers red. Great as always!

I like this last one with the bottom placement!

Thanks guys!

lunchboxbrain, FrickinAwesome, do you receive my email last day?

Wow, this has gotten fantastic! I love the bottom placement, and the whole design looks great.

THanks girl!

I got your email and responded FM.

Flying Mouse, I am officialy stating that you will get a 5$ from me on any shirt you submit

Good job! :-)

Thanks for your support, Mike!

v11. good job!

His right leg looks like it's on the wrong side or something... probably just me....

indeed it looks likes he's got 2 left feet

I like V12 and Bottom placement.

Ohh yes "flabb" I can see what you are telling...yes FM "flabb" has point.

great artwork, a lot of improvement over the versions. i'm not sure how well it would go over with the threadless crowd, though, unfortunately.

Im diggin it man, the hatching kind of contrasts with the clean scoreboard, though.

this finished scoring a while back...

good job like it

The title is improper, it should either be "Limited Amount of Time" or "Limited Time"

I'd do the full shirt version.

5$

V12 is great! I think you should submit now, lol, before the 13th! And the bend makes it real neat.

I know it's a bit late at this point, but I'd like the design better with the player not even looking at the ball.

yea totally, he should be looking to the right. it would be easy to fix

Hi guys, very sorry. I forgot to remove this critique. This design actually already submited in 1 months ago. And it's end for scoring.

i think the lower placement is better

Definitely lower.

i like the angle the scoreboard is in on v6

The lower placement without a doubt is better. Nice illustration.

i like the lower placement.

i would vote 5 for sure on this. sub it.



Critique mine please:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/27082/Homeless_Mythology

I love your character alone. The rest of it's cool, but I wonder if it would be a stronger composition without the scoreboard... Well done!